Make Your Verbs Work

Often, lists are more complex than just “a cat, a dog and a bunny.” When a list does start to get complicated, review the sentence to ensure that your verb works with each noun in the list.

IT DOESN’T WORK: The day of celebration includes a luncheon, candle ceremony, potluck dinner and the Rev. George Sanders will declare it to be Panda Bear Appreciation Day.
WORDIER, BUT THE VERBS TRACK: The day of celebration includes a luncheon, candle ceremony, potluck dinner and the Rev. George Sanders’ declaration of Panda Bear Appreciation Day.

In the first line, includes doesn’t work with Sanders will declare. (To visualize this, remove all the stuff before Sanders: “The day of celebration includes the Rev. George Sanders will declare it to be Panda Bear Appreciation Day.”)

But in the corrected line, includes works well with declaration of. (“The day of celebration includes the Rev. George Sanders’ declaration of Panda Bear Appreciation Day.”)

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